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Small shops in towns and villages are closing and replaced by big stores. Explain your opinion. Do you think it is good or bad?

#shops #towns #villages #stores
With the development of ,technology the number of towns is increased and villages are reduced and
also
 big stores are replaced.
This
 process is not good for nature and people living in the countryside. I think it is not good for some reasons.
First
 of all, lots of animals and species live in the nature and jungle and need clean weather and environment. In the following, if humans develop technology in pastoral, it is a danger for animals.
Also
, animals' foods are destroyed .
Second
, a lot of rural living and
also
 many product dairies are made by villagers.
Then
,
this
 fresh produce is reduced.
Also
, replacing big stores in the village create crowding places that cause bother villagers and species. In conclusion, developing technology and turning from small things into big things is a good idea but without hurt to nature.
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