It is impossible to help all people around the world in need so governments should focus on people from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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globe

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is not possible

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government

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’s concentration should be on their own

society

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need.

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I believe that governments should help if they are able to I

also

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strongly agree that they cannot help out

with

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every citizen around the world and

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they

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ought to focus on local needs before others. If the

government

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give out international

helps

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then

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they can guarantee that throughout difficulties or troubles they would

also

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be given a hand.

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, the time when there was an earthquake in Turkey Izmir, France was the

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to offer support while the Izmir citizens were in a very big disaster and it was a big tragedy for all.

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, the relationship between France and

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got stronger

that

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time and Turkey consider

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indebted to France and stands ready to help them if they

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go through any disaster. Another reason that

government

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should help others is humanity. It is human nature to help when there is

ability

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to do so. On

whole

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it seems impossible to help every individual in all

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they can give aid to some nations or go for help when there is a natural disaster or a big tragedy somewhere.

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, I assume that the priority and focus of countries should be on

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community. When a society has followed and elected a

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, that

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now is responsible for the society and has

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to meet the needs of its people. The

government

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has a huge responsibility to provide products and services

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individuals cannot get themselves like making roads, bridges, green areas and public transportation and all the other public needs.

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has to provide survival and security.

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they should support their own locals

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so they can survive. They should make themselves strong enough

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they will be able to continue and be safe. The other reason is that if the

government

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don

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not put

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themselves before the others

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they may fall

during

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any

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trouble and not only they cannot help themselves they would

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be a challenge to other countries and put them

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difficulty

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to solve their problems. In conclusion, in my

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it is I agree with the statement that it is very important for governments to help their own locals before the other nations around the globe. It is essential to meet their own needs

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after they may be able to give a hand to other citizens around the globe too.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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424 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

limited resources
moral obligation
global stability
economic impact
domestic issues
international aid
diplomatic relationships
resource allocation
healthcare
education
infrastructure
national priorities
desperate need
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