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Some people think that the government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others argue it is the responsibility of each individual. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The line graph illustrates the variety of
air
pullutants'
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pollutants
pollutant
 sources in Grand Britain, namely industry,
transport
 and household, from 1990 to 2005, in
million
tonnes
. Overall, it is clear that the highest
air
 pollutant belonged to
industry
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the industry
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 section
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period, with a slight
fell
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 over the following
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fifteen
fiftheen
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fifteen
 years, the total amount of
air
 pollutants, meanwhile, decreased in the consecutive years. From 1990 to 2002, it can be seen that while all the figures declined,
the
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transport
's figure fluctuated in these years, and at
last
, increased to around 2.5
million
tonnes
 in 2002.
Moreover
, the decreasing rate of
indusrty
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industry
 section was much more than
housholdes
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households
 source; whereas, dropped from around 6 to 2
million
tonnes
, equalling with
transport
 section at end of
this
 period. From 2002 onwards, the figures for transportation continued to surge, and reached the peak
to
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 3
million
tonnes
, in 2005.
On the other hand
, the rest of the other
air
 pollution sources dropped to 2 and 0 for
indusrty
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industry
 and households respectively.
Although
 the
amount
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number
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 of
transport
 pollutants surged, the total amount of
air
 pollutants fell in
this
 particular country, between 1990 and 2005.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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