These days more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this , but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties.

It is considered that everyone can find more opportunities overseas, in
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way the number
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moving to other countries is
uplifting
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day in and day out. In the following pARAGRAPHS I will discuss both sides, provide my own opinion and find pros and cons. On the one hand, while students stay in another country, they are developing their level of thinking and
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more open-minded. They are trying to combine study and work,
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they get new habits
such
as creating an excellent
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and
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their critical thinking. Well-known personalities
such
as
Ilon
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Elon
Mask and Steve Jobs experienced poor
life
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conditions ,
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they easily find ways to solve problems as well as they own illustrious companies. It is believed that people become industrious and quick-witted
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when they are left with problems.
Additionally
, it may lead to new ideas and openings in several spheres. Alikhan Mukhamedali(owner of "6inch" company,
for example
, was inspired by new ideas in South Korea, where street food was highly valued.
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a lot of ways to become the best version of yourself abroad.
On the other hand
, it is risky to live alone until you go to your country.According to
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recent studies, about 69% of individuals are suffering from feeling
themselves
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lonely and
homesickness
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overseas. They do not find any
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in their life,
as a
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it looks
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monotonous and life without bright
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. It leads to bad habits,
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us
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smoking, narco addictions and mental issues.
Hence
, leaving overseas has several consequences and
background
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. By the way of conclusion, I would like to clarify my opinion that
pros
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of staying abroad outweigh its cons.We should be aware of all consequences until we move there as well as
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prepared for new opportunities and challenges in
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anew
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place.
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