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In some cultures, children are often toldthat they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of given children this message?

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There has been a continuous debate on whether it's possible for a country to have a powerful
economy
 and a clean
environment
 at the same time. In my opinion,
this
 goal is achievable and I shall explain both views and give my reasons for my own point of view. To commence with, there are many
countries
 that
besides
 having a clean
environment
, have a strong
economy
.
For instance
, Canada is one of those
countries
 that has made
a
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huge progress by utilizing renewable
energy
 in its factories
instead
 of other sources of
energy
 that damage the
environment
 like fossil fuels. Another example would be the replacement of gasoline engine cars with electronic cars, which has been made possible due to the advancements that have been made in technology in recent decades.
on the other hand
, in
countries
 like Qatar that are not technologically developed in comparison with European
countries
, there hasn't been any movement towards using eco-friendly products and are usually dependent on their oil, which is primarily used in their factories and
as a result
, the air pollution is quite high in these
countries
.
However
, even in
countries
 where conditions for usage of renewable
energy
 are not available, the government could concentrate more on other sources to develop its
economy
 like tourism, and agriculture
instead
 of being solely dependent on fossil fuels like gasoline or oil. In conclusion, a strong
economy
 and a clean
environment
 are not
in contrast
 with each other, because technology has a great impact on the usage of eco-friendly products and renewable
energy
, which are available in many
countries
.
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