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In some cultures, children are often toldthat they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of given children this message?

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There has been a continuous debate on whether it's possible for a country to have a powerful
economy
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 and a clean
environment
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 at the same time. In my opinion,
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 goal is achievable and I shall explain both views and give my reasons for my own point of view. To commence with, there are many
countries
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 that
besides
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 having a clean
environment
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, have a strong
economy
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.
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, Canada is one of those
countries
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 that has made
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huge progress by utilizing renewable
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 in its factories
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 of other sources of
energy
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 that damage the
environment
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 like fossil fuels. Another example would be the replacement of gasoline engine cars with electronic cars, which has been made possible due to the advancements that have been made in technology in recent decades.
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, in
countries
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 like Qatar that are not technologically developed in comparison with European
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, there hasn't been any movement towards using eco-friendly products and are usually dependent on their oil, which is primarily used in their factories and
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, the air pollution is quite high in these
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.
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, even in
countries
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 where conditions for usage of renewable
energy
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 are not available, the government could concentrate more on other sources to develop its
economy
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 like tourism, and agriculture
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 of being solely dependent on fossil fuels like gasoline or oil. In conclusion, a strong
economy
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 and a clean
environment
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 are not
in contrast
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 with each other, because technology has a great impact on the usage of eco-friendly products and renewable
energy
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, which are available in many
countries
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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