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In conclusion, I think médical research is only. limited to people dealing with a specific sickness, while environmental problems are important in a global level and affect all of the people. As a result I think the government should assign more money to research on environmental issues rather than to medical research...

some people believe that the government should allocate more budget to medical
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 and less to environmental
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. I completely disagree with
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 opinion and I shall explain my reasons in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the environment is an inseparable part of our lives.
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, air pollution has become an issue in many countries, which has resulted in
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significant growth of
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 as asthma and cancer in recent decades.
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, the appearance of a large number of
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 is the result of less attention to the environment.
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,
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 has shown that the release of plastic bottles into the ocean has caused the tiny pieces of plastics to be eaten by fish and
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 enter our bodies, which has resulted in an increased number of birth defects in recent years.
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,
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 medical
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 is a necessity in order to find cures for different kinds of
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, I think prevention is better than cure since an enormous number of
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 have originated from environmental issues. In conclusion, I think medical
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 is only limited to people dealing with a specific sickness, while environmental problems are important
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 a global level and affect all people.
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, I think the government should assign more money to
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on
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environmental issues rather than to medical
research
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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