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Many parents these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think the advantages of development outweigh its disadvantages?

#parents #work #countries #families #development
With the yearning for better jobs, currently, there is a tendency for many
parents
 to move to foreign
countries
 for working with their families. From a personal perspective, I consider that the benefits of
this
 trend outweigh its drawbacks. On the one hand, there are some disadvantages in some aspects of
this
 trend. The kids may seriously suffer mental issues due to difficulties adapting to the new environment.
For example
, Vietnamese
children
 are hard
to
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familiar
to
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with
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 American foods in which most foods have
the
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a
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 fat taste
such
 as hamburgers, sandwiches, cheese,
ect
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etc
instead
 of rice in Vietnam.
Moreover
,
this
 case may cause limitations in the communication of
children
 in foreign
countries
. Generally,
children
 cannot smoothly speak
foreign
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 language at the beginning.
Thus
, there is a gap in terms of interaction between these
children
 and foreign people, especially their new friends and teachers.
This
 leads to a change in the character of
children
, which means they can be introverted over time. They may encounter geographical problems when communicating with relatives in their hometown. Living in a new area in
other
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countries
 with
parents
 may result in negative impacts
to
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children
.
On the other hand
, in spite of these aforementioned disadvantages, admittedly, some following advantages are probably dominant in the discussed topic.
Children
 can fully enjoy happiness during their childhoods and growth path when living with
parents
.
Hence
,
parents
 will spend more time
on
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educating, playing games, watching films, going on picnics,
even
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and even
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 preparing traditional Vietnamese foods to take care of
theỉr
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their
 kids and directing them
how
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 to adapt to a new environment.
This
 helps prevent
children
 from
stress
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.
Besides
,
a
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high-quality education and culture in developed
countries
benefits
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children
 in their life from
their
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 early
ages
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age
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. When acquiring theoretical knowledge combined with practical ones through modern facilities,
for
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 laboratories, in these
countries
,
children
 have
higher
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 probability to land
on
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better jobs because they are able to apply what they learned in reality.
Thus
, it is ensured that they have promotion opportunities in their career path.
In addition
, currently, there are many social platforms including Facebook, Instagram, Facetime, etc. for
children
 to easily keep tight relationships with their beloveds in other regions over the world. In conclusion, through the convincing benefit of the tendency that
parents
 these days work in other
countries
, taking their families with them, the detrimental impacts are faded.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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