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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
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 state that nowadays we have too many choices. I think it is true that we have lots of
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 and big opportunities nowadays as technology is developing. In
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 essay, I will explain why I totally agree with
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 statement. On the one hand, nowadays
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 can find pieces of information using different apps and websites. It is true that Google is a typical example as it is a legendary source of information for our community. A lot of
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 search Google to find facts and answers to questions or have access to different websites that enable them to do thousands of things.
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, we have lots of choices.
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, I often access Messenger on Google to ask my cousin who lives in the South of Vietnam and that's enabling me to have better
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 and more chances as she often gives me smart advice. So, I think smart devices enable us to have a big vision and have lots of
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.
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, other
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 may think these varied
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 may confuse us.
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, I think we are lucky to live in
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 generation because of its magnificent opportunities. To illustrate
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, now I can travel to regions of my country easily and maybe work there to have a better life with a big wage.
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, I'm so grateful for
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 chance and everyone should be. Our world gives us chances to improve and be better individuals. In conclusion, some
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 believe that nowadays we have too many choices. It is true that technology and a diverse mix of cultures enable us to have that. I am grateful for it and you all should be.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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