Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. Do you agree or dis agree?

Many
people
believe that so as to resolve traffic and transportation
problems
,
population
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the population
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should be induced to immigrate
suburbs
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. Moving out to suburbs might solve the
problems
by reducing
population
. In
this
essay, I will argue that living in
countryside
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the countryside
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may bring about many
problems
and we cannot solve
these problem
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this problem
these problems
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with
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in
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this
way.
Firstly
, the world today is global and
people
live in a huge
community
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communities
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.
Cities
offer more occasion for society
also
there are many
opportunity
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such
as
job
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jobs
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, socializing,
education
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and education
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.
For example
, the
best known
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universities are located in
cities
,
the
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and the
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most valuable companies build their facilities in the city
centers
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centres
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such
as Silicon Valley. If we encourage
people
to move out to
countryside
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the countryside
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, they cannot easily accept and there will be a series of conflicts among
people
who live in
cities
.
However
, allocating human power
into
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city
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cities
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and suburbs can be a very useful solution because we can break down
irregular
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the irregular
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of
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apply
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the population
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population
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populations
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who
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hold in
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a city
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city
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cities
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densely.
In addition
,
increasing
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the increasing
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population
in
cities
leads to cause pollution. Reducing vehicle
create
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a fully open roads
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a fully open road
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for public transportation.
People
who travel in commute time go to their jobs easily. To summarize, encouraging
people
to live in villages is so much
difficult
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more difficult
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to try
it
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apply
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than think it. Authorities may face many
problems
which do not have any solution
although
in
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the
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scratch it was providing a solution to a lot of
countries’
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countries
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difficulties. They try to develop effective strategies to manage it.
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