Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only; others, however, feel cell phones should be used mostly for work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ​

Nowadays, in
this
modern era people are completely attached to
cell
phones
they spend most of the time on their mobile
phones
rather than
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with parents and friends. some people believe that
phones
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for only
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their
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their
personal
use
while
,
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others think that
cell
use
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for
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work
that
i
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will discuss both views in
further
paragraphs. On the one hand, individuals like to spend time on social media they watch a
lot
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interesting things on their
phones
. They are
has
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as
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a
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personal
accounts
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on websites.
Moreover
, in
the
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daily ,routine they share numerous
picture
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pictures
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and
video
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on
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their friends and relatives. It
provide
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pessimistic
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effect on their relationship because in
this
modern era, the young generation
busy
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on the internet
the
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they
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don't
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like to talk with
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their
theri
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their
gardeans
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guardians
gardens
it
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its
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cells provide a generation gap.
For example
, a survey conducted by BBC news channel
it
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showed that 70% to 80%
children
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of children
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in
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the 9 years age
they
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have their own phone.
On the other hand
, people should
be
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use
mobile
phones
for
work
only
it
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is more beneficial for society and the environment because
cell
phones
create numerous kinds of rays in nature it directly provides
a
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negative
effects
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effect
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on the birds.
for example
, according to the study, in the two
decades
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30% of the birds' population dramatically decreased to mobile towers signals. The public
use
for
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their mobile phone for
work
only they should share only
regarding
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their office
work
or important documents. In my opinion, Mobile is very useful for the public they can easily communicate with their friends and relatives. They should
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have less
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less
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use
for
cell
phones
because their signal directly impacts the birds.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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