More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number,…) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Presently,the

internet

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display of personal data like

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and mobile phone numbers for the purpose of online financial transactions and socialization has

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on the rise. Wealth generation is an important benefit of

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trend

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.

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the surge in the rate of

cyber crime

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since

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onset cannot be overlooked. I believe that

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trend

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has more good impacts.

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,

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pros and cons in

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in the subsequent paragraphs.

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with,

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generation is an essential benefit of

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occurrence. It has become easy for clients to reach out to their vendors on calls because their contact numbers were made accessible to the public thereby enabling sales and transactions to be made.

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, buying and selling of goods

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become faster since phone numbers are made visible on the

internet

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calls could easily be made with the seller and with the display of bank details,payment is no longer a

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challenge

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thereby more money is raised.

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, the time of response to emergency situations has become shorter because the individuals are easily contacted in cases of occurrence of bad events.To illustrate, the fire service group are easily called on cell phones in situations

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as fire incident.

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enables the early arrival to the scene and quick stoppage of the incident.

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the good effects of

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trend

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enormous.

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,

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trend

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has led to a rise in the occurrence of cyber crimes.

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is because of the easy access to personal data

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the

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internet

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fraudsters

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to hack into the accounts of their targets.

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, the knowledge of a person's account number

make

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it possible for the

individuals

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money to be stolen

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leaving the

humanbeing

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human being

bankrupt. To conclude, I think that the

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of the

trend

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is

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of great

benefits

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since it allows people to make money and even enables

for

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quick emergency response.

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,the surge in

internet

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fraud is worrisome.

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, the government should regulate the way

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which

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individuals

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personal details are being assessed.