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Tests and examinations are central feature of school systems in many countries. Do you think the educational benefits of testing overweigh any disadvantages?

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last
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 few decades, there has been significant development in the educational
system
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. In most
countries
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 we can find an effective educational
system
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 that
emphasizes
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on
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apply
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various assessment methods to evaluate the
student's
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students'
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 knowledge. In my
perception
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perception,
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 the pros brought by tests outweigh the cons. The main benefit is that the
students
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 acquire knowledge on various aspects by the end of their curriculum.
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, tests and examinations are performed quarterly and yearly to check the level of information they have managed to learn from the lecture classes.
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, the teachers evaluate how effective the teaching methods are on
students
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.
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also
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 helps the teachers to identify the weak
students
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 and concentrate on them more. The significant negative impact of educational testing is the stress that they face in order to accomplish their goal. In
early
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 days, we could find most
students
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 fall into unhealthy lifestyles like the habit of smoking as they find it difficult to cope with the stress they receive from the educational
system
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as
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 well as from parents. As years passed, it
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 observed that
students
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 find it less stressful as they have
a
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 improved and developed educational
system
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 and
well educated
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 parents who are caring and understanding. As we say, knowledge always has a beginning and no end. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 educational testing should be
improvised
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 yearly in a manner that it should be beneficial to
students
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 rather than adversely affecting them. Education is the backbone of a society.
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, efforts should be made to improve the quality of education.

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task response
Plan before you write. State your view in the first sentence. Then give two or three big ideas to back your view. Use one or two simple examples. Finish with a short end that matches your view.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph link to the next. Use small words to show order: first, next, but, so. Start each paragraph with one clear idea sentence. Put one idea in each paragraph.
language
Keep to short words. Watch small mistakes like 'emphasizes on' or 'an improved'. Use simple tense and form. Read the work aloud to find problems.
content
The essay shows a clear view that tests have both good and bad sides.
structure
It has three parts: introduction, body and conclusion.
content
The writer gives two main ideas about how tests affect learning and stress.
content
The ending says tests can be improved.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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