The arts including art, music and theatre and considered to be important to the society. Do you think the arts still have a place amongst our modern Lifestyle? Should the arts be included in the curriculum?

Art
, one of the important aspects of society with
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change
in
art
is always observed. It has many forms like music, theatre, paintings etc all of which are an important part of human civilization.
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essay will discuss, the place of
art
in the modern lifestyle and whether or not it should be included in the curriculum.
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what is
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an art
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and what is its importance
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Art
has always been a medium
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expressing thoughts, feelings and emotions.
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just not a word, it has many names dance,music etc all of which are considered a form of
art
, sometimes these arts were so influential that they have changed the tide of
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the war
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for example
: during revolution many songs were written which influenced revolutionaries to the extent that burned the castle and uprooted the government.
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art
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importance of it. With the
change
in time
change
in
art
is observed. Modern-day
art
is way different
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it used to be but it is as important as always . It is basically a form of communication and that's not it , it
also
helps in making people/artist creative, increasing
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thought process . Though
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art
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its importance has not it
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important as it always
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been even in the modern lifestyle. To make our society more perfect and to prosper
art
should be included in the curriculum. Young minds should be introduced to the wonders of
art
at the early stage of their journey so that their little minds grow and prosper as they are the future of society. Though the form of
art
has changed it still has
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place in the modern lifestyle and it will always have its place no matter what era is it. Including it in the education system is very helpful and essential and should be done.
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