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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

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The following bar chart gives information about the percentage of British people who had five or more pieces of fruit and vegetables every day between 2001 and 2008. It is clear that while the vast majority of women and men used the items mostly in the years 2006 and 2007, children recorded the highest level in 2007. About 23% of women had a healthy diet in 2001 and their tendency to have these kinds of diets increased over the
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 five years and peaked at 35% in 2006. The figure fell to just above 30% in 2007 and
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, came back to the 2005 level which was 30%. The proportion of children and men who ate the mentioned ingredients was around 13% and 17% respectively in 2001 and it remained unchanged till 2003. The number of men keen on the diet increased gradually and was highest in 2006 and 2007 at about 27% before falling back to just over 25% in 2008. Children consumed more green food in the following 5 years as well and ate the maximum amount in 2007 with almost 26%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart diseases
  • nutritional deficiency
  • malnutrition
  • convenience
  • nutritional value
  • busy lifestyles
  • balanced meals
  • economic impact
  • lower-income groups
  • healthier alternatives
  • cultural heritage
  • culinary diversity
  • mass production
  • environmental degradation
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