In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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In modern society, there are numerous
graduates
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with high education who are unemployed. In
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essay, I will be proposing the reasons for highly qualified
graduates
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' unemployment and possible solutions for them.
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of all, the lack of experience from young
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will be the
first
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reason. These
workers
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are usually fresh
graduates
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, which have had no long-term job experience before. In comparison, aged
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tend to have better skills than the freshmen of society,
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employers
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are usually less interested in young
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. The
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reason would be the rarity of job opportunities in the current market.
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, in 2019, the COVID-19 pandemic caused many people to lose their jobs globally.
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, many companies' income had come to a new low. In
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situation, only fewer job opportunities will be released into the market.
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, I believe there are two possible solutions to
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problem. From the perspective of
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to solve the problem,
employers
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should abandon the old-mined opinions of newer generations since young
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are more willing to learn new expertise, and they demand less in wages
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.
Employers
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should be more willing to treat new and old
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equally and provide the same opportunities.
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, from the societal perspective,
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the world's economy is brought down by the pandemic,
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, companies like Google or Apple, are less likely to have bad revenue,
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they can be providing jobs to these new highly qualified
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. To conclude,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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