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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Especially, those living in undeveloped countries and developing countries tend to consume
junk
food
 too .That condition causes an extreme number of problems that we do not imagine. To me,
governments
 are supposed to take action about
this
 problem. By raising the tax on
junk
food
, consumers are able to direct healthy
food
 and so countries' health expenses would decrease.
Secondly
,
governments
 get extra income from
junk
food
 tax. Nowadays, the majority of people encounter economic crises in their daily life. As time rolls,
this
 problem spread all around to world. Economists indicate that the selling of products taken extra taxes drop out obviously. Even though, some humans give up their addiction due to taxes. Cigarette addiction is described as one of the hardest addictions for consumers.Despite
this
 fact , with the economic trouble consumers have to give up Tabacco. After that method, doctors impart that at the same time, the rate of cancer decreased with the usage of cigarettes.Fortunately,
government's
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 economic approach affects public health indirectly. If the same political is applied to the fast
food
 industry it may result in the example of tobacco. With the commence of 21. centuries, humans life style and
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 completely. İn the old times, most humans prefer to make their
food
 on their own. Even those living village produce their vegetables and fruits themself.Without taking any help, most
of
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people subsist on their basic domestic work.But nowadays, most people do not prefer a healthy lifestyle. İnstead of caring for fruits and vegetables on their own they take their products from markets.
Governments
 should realize
this
 fact and make money. An unbelievable number of
junk
 foods are sold on the market.By taking a tax on fast
food
governments
 gain extra income.
As a result
, Without any ,doubt
governments
 are supposed to take higher taxes on
junk
food
. It is good for public health or government income.
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