What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It’s true that modern
people
have become lazier than their ancestors. The vital importance of making exercises on a daily basis has faded away.
People
prefer relaxing at home over going to the gym. I completely agree with
this
statement, as we are living in
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world where you can get absolutely everything without going out. At the outset, there are
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numerous
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reasons why human physical activity has decreased, but the most important
one
is on the surface and
this
is technology. The whole industry encourages our children to lead
sedentary
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lifestyle
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,
for instance
sitting in front of the computer playing different video games. Youtube offers the chance to sit and watch
one
programme after the
next
one
without
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, you can even watch the whole tv show season
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day. Another example, a century ago there
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no remote controls which are used to switch the channels,
although
today
people
can do everything without getting up, just moving
one
finger.
Consequently
, with fewer gyms and too many technological facilities, sickness and obesity have been killing many around the world.
Secondly
, physical activities were widespread in comparison with now.
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, big
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and companies even used to pay
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sport
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classes like aerobics, yoga or Pilates for their employees. Nowadays as we can see the majority of jobs require mental abilities,
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time has switched to team computer gaming which is replacing
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sports. To summarize, young
people
today are less active and
that is
definitely something that we should be concerned about. It would be wrong to put all the blame on technology, as
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progress is always good, but we should do our best and the government must introduce some obligor=tory activities for youngsters in order to improve the situation.
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