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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts give information about the variation in electrical devices used and the
time
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 consumed
in
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on
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 regular household chores over a period of 100 years. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that
due to
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 the increased usage of electrical goods, the
time
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 spent in housekeeping has been decreasing over the given
time
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 period.
To begin
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 with, the utilisation of washing machines and vacuum cleaners followed a similar trend until they crossed
their
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apply
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paths in 1960, with the former showing a fluctuating trend between 70 and 75% in 1960 and 2019 respectively, and the latter showing
a
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significant growth from 70% to 100% in 2000.
On the other hand
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, refrigerators were almost zero in 1920, but
thereafter
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 their consumption skyrocketed to 200% by 1960. The
time
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 spent on household work was significantly reduced, starting from 70 hours a week in 1922, to almost 20 hours by 1960.
This
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 was followed by a gradual decrease to nearly 10 hours a week in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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