Write a paragraph of problem on the following topic: Some teenagers spend a lot of time playing computer games and this can cause both social and health problems for them. What are some of the problems caused by playing computer games and what are the solutions?

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causes a lot of problems. The main problem is that they spend too much time sitting in front of the computer screen, which will affect their health. If they play late, it will affect their daily activities. They may go to school, be late for work, or always be sleep deprived. Over time, they will have eye and muscle problems. Another problem is that they will lack interaction with the outside world. They do not interact with people, they isolate themselves, which will cause many mental problems. Parents and schools will need to pay closer attention to you and find ways to avoid negative consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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