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Write a 4-paragraph essay of about 200-250 words on the following topic: Many young people spend a lot of time on the Internet without any parental supervision or control. What are some of the problems caused by unrestricted use of the Internet and what can be done to curb these problems?

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Over the past two decades, the
Internet
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 has taken a huge leap forward.
This
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 is very clear when we can see that social networks, video games and e-commerce exchanges are attracting strong interest from individuals, especially young
people
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 with a lot of
time
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 using the
Internet
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. If they do it without parental control, it can cause many problems for society and
children
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's health. The unrestricted use of the
Internet
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 can cause a lot of problems for young
people
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.
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,
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 tend to post photos and personal
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of
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 young
people
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 on Facebook. It can lead to privacy issues and threats related to cybercrime. Choosing to publicize a lot of personal
information
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 on social networks can lead to some dangerous cases
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 as having your bank account stolen,
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or being
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 kidnapped because the bad guys may already know
your
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 personal
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 you shared. To address
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 issue, parents and teachers need to be jointly aware of the dangers of sharing
information
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 and teach
children
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 about the enormous consequences of online interactions.
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, wasting
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 on the
internet
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 can be harmful to
children
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's health, especially their eyes. If they spend too much
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 using the
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, their eyes will get hurt. And some health problems
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 as obesity due to inactivity lead to their studies or work being distracted. Parents need to control their
children
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's daily
internet
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 habits by paying attention to what their
children
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 are doing on the
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. That's the best way to protect them from potential risks. To sum up, I believe that the
internet
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 is a double-edged sword. Parents need to control the
time
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 and habits of their
children
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 using the
internet
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 every day, in order to stay healthy and develop in the most comprehensive way in today's modern life, use the
Internet
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 in a more positive way.

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