Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is argued that people have various opportunities in modern society. In my opinion, I partially agree with
this
statement since people in developed countries
indeed have a range of choices. However
, this
situation might be slightly different in some developing countries
.
On the one hand, citizens in some developing countries
are not able to share the same right with
those in developed Change preposition
as
countries
. Firstly
, developing countries
' residents confront with
Change preposition
apply
the
strict policy as well as management from the government, which Correct article usage
apply
limit
them in many ways. Correct subject-verb agreement
limits
For example
, in China, the
visa for heading Correct article usage
a
other
Change preposition
to other
countries
can not be approved if the purpose is unclear. Secondly
, the
age and gender can be the most prominent hinder when employees are searching Correct article usage
apply
new
jobsChange preposition
for new
,
since some companies who have prejudices on these factors tend to reject the applications. Yet these issues Remove the comma
apply
are less happened
in developed Change to the active voice
less happen
have less happened
countries
. Finally
, some possibilities are stacked by the economic condition of families in developing countries
since the government can't support them with financial helps
.
Change the wording
help
bits of help
On the other hand
, concerning about
the improvement that the government worldwide are made, the situation become better, as more and more opportunities are offered by them. In developed Change preposition
apply
countries
, governments not only give financial support for
their own citizensChange preposition
to
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
offer helps
Correct subject-verb agreement
help
for
those Change preposition
to
live
oversea. Wrong verb form
living
For instance
, they may give hands on
Change preposition
to
the
students who have no capability on chasing their Correct article usage
apply
study
due to Fix the agreement mistake
studies
the
poverty. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, not to mention that some developed countries
highly welcome to
immigrants who live in dangerous environments.
In conclusion, people are having more and more choices nowadays Change preposition
apply
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
with
the past, while some places still show the limitations of choosing freely.Change preposition
to
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