Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that people have various opportunities in modern society. In my opinion, I partially agree with
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statement since people in developed
countries
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indeed have a range of choices.
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,
this
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situation might be slightly different in some developing
countries
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. On the one hand, citizens in some developing
countries
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are not able to share the same right
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those in developed
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.
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, developing
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' residents confront
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the
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apply
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strict policy as well as management from the government, which
limit
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limits
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them in many ways.
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, in China,
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visa for heading
other
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countries
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can not be approved if the purpose is unclear.
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,
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age and gender can be the most prominent hinder when employees are searching
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for new
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jobs
,
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apply
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since some companies who have prejudices on these factors tend to reject the applications. Yet these issues
are less happened
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in developed
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.
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, some possibilities are stacked by the economic condition of families in developing
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since the government can't support them with financial
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help
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.
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, concerning
about
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the improvement that the government worldwide are made, the situation become better, as more and more opportunities are offered by them. In developed
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, governments not only give financial support
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their own citizens
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but
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offer
helps
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help
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for
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to
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those
live
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oversea.
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, they may give hands
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to
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the
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students who have no capability on chasing their
study
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studies
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due to
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poverty.
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, not to mention that some developed
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highly welcome
to
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immigrants who live in dangerous environments. In conclusion, people are having more and more choices nowadays
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with
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the past, while some places still show the limitations of choosing freely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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