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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

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•In the past decade, there has been a signific increase in the number and variety of online
courses
 accessible to mature.
This
 has been appreciated as a major chance by numerous
of
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students
,in whatever way different
students
 see these
courses
 of studying as less beneficial than classroom teaching. There are certainly several reasons why they think so and there are advantages and disadvantages of studying online
and
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I will discuss
about
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 reasons. • There are a number of significant benefits of studying online classes it is acceptable why of studying distance I concede that it is very comfortable and creates many connections for
students
 and
students
 can get free
education
 through private lessons or
study
 in the direction of their choice,
moreover
 all
students
 can
use
 the online
courses
 of the teacher they want. There is a lot of material needed to
study
 online
courses
 and they can
use
 online
courses
 when
students
 have free time. For
example
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everyone
 was shocked when the Covid-19 pandemic history planet. No one could ever leave their home, neither went to school nor to extracurricular activities, even the government did not know that
everyone
 does but at
this
 time no one stopped classes and
everyone
 took online classes studied online and older
people
also
 worked online but according to a survey of many humans, several
people
 prefer offline
education
 because
in
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 offline
education
, all
students
 can learn face-to-face with the teachers and they can
also
use
 them to understand the topics they do not understand or ask additional questions to learn what they do not know. • Many
people
 think that offline
education
 has its downsides ,maybe so but just like everything else there are downsides to online
education
 and several examples
such
 shortcomings can be given,
for
example
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everyone
 needs a phone or computer to
study
 online and not
everyone
 knows how to
use
 it can be difficult to
use
,
moreover
everyone
 needs internet to
study
 online and some village the internet is very low compared to the cities and
this
 is one of the biggest problems but nowadays the technology developing and the internet speed is increasing in the villages as well as the cities • In conclusion, having everything mentioned up. I can come to
conclusion
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 that distance learning has more benefits than
drawback
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drawbacks
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 a light of the fact that teenagers can stay safe and many
people
 in several countries prefer to get online
education
 and
this
education
 is very high quality a • • •
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