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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
It is argued that
plastic
 shopping packets
has
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 been
utilizing
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 popularly
over
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 the world which is
effecting
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affecting
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 badly to the natural environment
.
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badly.
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. I completely agree with
this
 view and think that they should
to
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stop using shopping
bags
 in order to avoid
the
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environmental problems. First of all,
to ban using
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banning the use of
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plastic
 packets is beneficial
to keep
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 fresh and clean the nature. If humans reduce the amount of
using
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plastic
package
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after
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it would help to mitigate the major problems which is
making
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 some
troubles
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 for
environment
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the environment
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. Take an example, over a decade utilizing and
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 away
the
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plastic
bags
amount has
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increase
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 and
this
 state
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cause
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to
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them to
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 die
a
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out
the
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 ecosystem.
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, using
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shopping paper
bags
 is
completely
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 worthwhile option to save the natural flora and fauna
instead
 of utilizing
plastic
bags
. Second
of
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all
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, another benefit to
outlaw using
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outlawing the use of
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plastic
 packages is that
this
 system of government might
to
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prevent lots of difficult
situation
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situations
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 which is influencing negatively for both terrestrial
habitat
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habitats
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 and marine life.
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,
with
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this
way
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 we may be able to save
the
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terrestrial and marine animals and
plants
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plant
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 life. For instance, in the USA schools and universities
had
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 installed
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a “natural
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“natural
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a “natural
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 environment”
programme
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programs
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 which
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focuses
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focus
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 on
animals
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habitants
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habitats
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,
as a result
 of
this
 system they
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has
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been saving too many rare
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animals'
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animals
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animals'
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 life.
That is
way
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why
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,
government
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the government
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 should set up these types of
index
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indexes
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 and programmes not only
to
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 educational facilities but
also
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community places for people
care
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 about the ecosystem. To recapitulate, I strongly believe that
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 to utilizing the sale packets
is
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brings far more boons
,
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 because it makes the environment spic and span and
help
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 to avoid
from
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troubles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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