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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the cause? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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The Pie charts illustrate the proportion of
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 aged 23-65 who took up various Professions in England. Overall, it is clear that the number of
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 who do not have any job in
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 is greater than The average in Britain. Some other occupations,
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, are roughly equal. In
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, the most popular occupation is Personal service, while the residents rarely take up professional
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. The figures for Unemployed and shop
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 make up %14 of the chart, in
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, the Popular professions. in
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, namely Personal Service and office wore, consist 121 and 118 respectively.
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, Technical
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 was %19 and Professional
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 was 18 in 2008. In the UK,
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 tended to choose. office
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, fewer
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 take up construction
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. It can be seen that the rate of jobless individuals. in the uke is less than
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 in general. In regard to Technical
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, 17% of the whole population of the UK had
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 occupation which was roughly double that of
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 in 2008.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Homeownership
  • Investment
  • Cultural significance
  • Financial security
  • Equity
  • Appreciation
  • Societal norms
  • Peer pressure
  • Social status
  • Stability
  • Lease renewal
  • Personal freedom
  • Modify
  • Property values
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