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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the cause? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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The Pie charts illustrate the proportion of
people
 aged 23-65 who took up various Professions in England. Overall, it is clear that the number of
people
 who do not have any job in
Ashby
 is greater than The average in Britain. Some other occupations,
however
, are roughly equal. In
Ashby
, the most popular occupation is Personal service, while the residents rarely take up professional
work
. The figures for Unemployed and shop
work
 make up %14 of the chart, in
Ashby
.
moreover
, the Popular professions. in
Ashby
, namely Personal Service and office wore, consist 121 and 118 respectively.
On the other hand
, Technical
work
 was %19 and Professional
work
 was 18 in 2008. In the UK,
Although
 more
people
 tended to choose. office
work
, fewer
people
 take up construction
work
. It can be seen that the rate of jobless individuals. in the uke is less than
Ashby
 in general. In regard to Technical
work
, 17% of the whole population of the UK had
this
 occupation which was roughly double that of
Ashby
 in 2008.
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