Some people think that computer games are bad for children, while others believe that they are useful. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of computer games and give your opinion

Playing computer
games
is widely spread among
children
. It has a beneficial side that these
games
improves
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skills and at the same ,time it has adverse effects like increasing the rate of obesity and addiction towards it. The positive side of playing
games
can make the
children
become more creative and improve the skills like decision making, analytics and problem-solving.
Also
,enhance technical knowledge which is more vital in
this
modern world.
Moreover
,it rejuvenates the sportsman spirit among
children
. According to a recent study, 65 per cent of students learn these skills at the early stages through playing computer
games
.
However
, it has its negative sides as well. It makes the
children
obese. Video
games
decrease their enthusiasm to go out and play outdoor
games
. Spending too much time indoors without
having
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proper exercise making the
children
fat.
In addition
,it may increase the addiction to these
games
which can distract them from learning and other social activities.
For example
, 70 per cent of
children
suffering from obesity are addicted to video
games
. In my opinion,
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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weigh over the advantages,
hence
parents should limit
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time of playing computer
games
and encourage them to play outside.
This
makes the
children
become healthier and active and will be a long-term asset in their lives.
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