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These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The given maps illustrate the city hospital access in 2007 and its modification in 2010. Overall, several changes can be seen according to the maps. It is clear that two roundabouts were added in 2010, and a number of
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 stops had been removed. Looking
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 at the changes on Hospital
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, the six
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 stops on the
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 had been removed and made way for the
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 station.
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, two roundabouts were added in 2010 at the junction with the ring
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 and the intersection with the city
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, where both of them were connected to the
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 station. Moving onto the car park, the original car park in 2007, which was opened to the public and staff, had been divided into two separate parking areas. In 2010, the one built adjacent to the hospital
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 was for staff only. Regarding the other car park, which was to the east of the ring
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, was opened to the public.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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