Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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in some
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students
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in every topic it is getting so mechanical and the
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could not
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attend
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every major that they want.
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50
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and 50 women it could be some trouble so maybe 40
female
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females
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want
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subject and 60
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males
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want
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10 people? So I believe it can not be a right
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law can change their future if they want some
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attend it.
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especially
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men
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universities
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want 50 per cent
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of woman
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woman
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women
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to start
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course and women do not want it
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other
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it. That`s so hard and it could not
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happen. All in
all
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ubiversities
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universities
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students
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to
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be free and take every
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major
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do not agree
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with
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free to
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learn
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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