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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

"Many people believe that the government should invest more in public transportation to reduce traffic congestion and air pollution. Others argue that individuals should take more responsibility for their own transportation needs and that the government should not spend more on public transportation. What is your opinion? Discuss both views and give your own perspective." This prompt asks you to explore both sides of the argument and then express your own opinion on the topic.

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One of the most gigantic issues today is global warming
as a result
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 of auto and burning fossil fuels. community hotly debated whether the council should encounter
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 problem or individuals. In
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 essay, I will examine both aspects of
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 trend and give my opinion on why
governments
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 should invest more in public transport. On the one hand, one of the reasons, perhaps more important, is that
governments
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 should fund public passage ,
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 as trains, and buses, to save our planet from warming. How many crowds own machines, means an increase in the temperature of the earth, so it is really essential to develop more on
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. In developing countries,
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, Iraq, there is no investment in public transit, there is no train or metro, that's why people use cars enormously and if you look at the list of lands for pollution Irak always stays at number 6 . People's income there is too low to take encounter by themselves.
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, there are some more important things that
governments
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 should develop.
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, health care sectors and education, need more investment than transportation. Without a better health condition and high-quality learning systems, countries stop developing and growing. So in
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 case, if individuals take more responsibility and be aware of how the increasing number of cars may affect our planet negatively,
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 authorities can spend money on, perhaps more essential, other things.
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,
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 individuals encounter
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, I believe
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 should play a crucial role in
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 issue and try to invest more in that way to make it easy for people to use public
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transportation

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly connects back to the main topic and contributes to your overall argument. Consider using more linking words to improve flow.
task achievement
Clarify your ideas and strengthen your arguments with more detailed examples, particularly in your second supporting point.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to enhance clarity and coherence in your writing.
task achievement
You have examined both sides of the argument, which is an important aspect of the task.
task achievement
Your introduction outlines the debate well and your opinion is clearly stated.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Air pollution
  • Sustainable
  • Infrastructure
  • Carpooling
  • Emission reduction
  • Public transit
  • Economic growth
  • Ride-sharing
  • Efficiency
  • Accessibility
  • Lower-income residents
  • Shift from private vehicles
  • Job creation
  • Technological advancements
  • Incentivize
  • Feasible
  • Reliable
  • Viable
  • Alleviate
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