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In Some Areas Of The US, A Curfew Is Imposed In Which Teenagers Cannot Be Out Of Doors At Night. Do you agree or disagree with this?

#areas #curfew #teenagers #doors #night
staying out late is treasured by many teenagers .in some parts of the state there is a time limit for
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 completely agree with
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first
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,teenagers tend to have
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impulsive behaviour .and
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night
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 they can go to parties and drink beers ,
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activities
activites
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 .drinking can make them unaware and gets into fights with one another,
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secondly
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 that
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its peak at
night
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unsafe
 to just go and hover around at
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 .it can lead to them being injured ,raped or even killed .now young adult usually have
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 of
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 and want to explore things around them , and having to be warned by their parents is not enough .laws must be forced .
finally
 , if there is no time limit for coming home ,
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 leads to them going to their bed late and
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 sleeping
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.
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detrimental
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 effect on their school performance . in conclusion, no harm can come from setting a curfew for
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teenagers
teanagers
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teenagers
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 do think its
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outright
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 its
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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