some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. why is this the case? do you think this is a positive or A negative development?

nowadays many

children

have filled their

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on

smartphones

. it can be

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a common activity in

modern

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world as people's lifestyle has changed in different aspects. whether

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hobby is positive or negative development will be discussed in

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essay. it is obvious that a lot of factors contribute to excessive use of a smartphone by kids.

firstly

, the availability

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new and cheap technological appliances like mobiles has been facilitated thanks to the advancement in Technologies.

secondly

, these days many families live in small apartments and most of them have an only child.

consequently

, their

children

are deprived of playing with their siblings in the yard. it may result in spending hours on

smartphones

in order to play or chat with their peers.

finally

, the lack of community spirit

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makes parents

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prevent their kids to get to know

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children

. so, they prefer to keep them at home and provide them

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facilities

such

as mobiles or video games to fill

this

vacuity. spending a lot of time on

smartphones

is a mixed-blessing issue.

in other words

, it has its own advantages and disadvantages simultaneously. one of the most important merits is improving different learning skills including cognitive and problem-solving abilities. it

also

promotes the coordination between eyes, ears and hands among pupils.

on the other hand

, spending too much time on phones may bring about health problems. more precisely, it is along with

sedentary

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lifestyle which in turn, can cause different illnesses like obesity.

moreover

, spreading

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violence

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behavior

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is another negative point of

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issue because many games are played in

violent

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atmosphere

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. in conclusion, it is ordinary for today's

children

to spend hours on

smartphones

every day. it happens mostly because of changes in individuals' way of life. I personally believe that it has its merits and drawbacks altogether.

however

, in my opinion, parents should set a constraint on the time

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their

children

spend on phones in order to maximize its benefits.