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After leaving school or university, young people should choose a job or career that they love, rather than one that pays the best salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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By the finishing the education period, the number of young individuals should pick out the
work
 that they fondness, rather than to chose the high earning. From my point of ,view the
second
 way is more significant and in
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essay I will discuss these two viewpoints in a depth. There is no secret that, that almost everyone wanted to
work
 in a good job since childhood, which they chose as a child, but when
this
 time comes they will think it over. They should think about it deeply
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 because nowadays we are living in
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 world where is almost everything depends on money, that means they should get into a space where is monthly payment is high. By earning more money they are able to live more comfortable and without any problems with financial position. Perhaps the majority of people choose
this
 way.
However
 the majority of humans prefer to
work
 at that job that they love and with
this
work
 they are happy because they prefer the interests of people higher than money, and that is why they are happy at least with a small salary, but with high-quality and exciting
work
 and of ,course the per cent of quality the job will be higher than others because he or she commits it with big potential . The main thing is – The love of
work
. In conclusion, individuals should think about the importance of finance in our improved world and make a perfect plan to build their future.
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