In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finising high school and starting university studies. discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young peoplewho decide to do this.

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in some countries are motivated to visit somewhere or engage in a job for a year after finishing high
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till they enter
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university
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process has advantages and disadvantages too. In
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I will discuss the plus points and bad points of work and travel between high
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education
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and
university
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education
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. Nowadays, most
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students
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prefer to do a job after high
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until
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entrance. There are some reasons for that. The main thing is they can earn during
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period and
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money can be spent
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their higher
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and they can have good experiences by travelling.
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,
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can invest these earnings. It will be profitable for their
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will be a good experience for the life.
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can manage their
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by taking these experiences as
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, there are some disadvantages too. If a student starts to earn he could addict to it. They can lose
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interest in studying. If we consider
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travelling,
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can have bad influences due to
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example,
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can addict to drugs and other bad things in society. That can badly affect to their
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their higher
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and
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their
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. These are huge disadvantages of working and travelling before
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education
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. In conclusion, most
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the
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countries encouraged
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students
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after high
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to work or travel before
university
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education
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. It will be beneficial for
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' economy and experience but in the same
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bad habits can damage the student's
future
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