The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems on emergencies than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
news
reporting in
media
tends to place a greater emphasis on
issues
and emergencies than on affirmative progress. Some
people
think that individuals or
society
could be negatively influenced by those reports.
However
, I strongly disagree with the idea because the public should acknowledge the precise recognition of social
issues
and
dark
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side
of
reality
, and if the
media
continue to prioritize reporting positive developments,
people
could overlook the serious social
problems
.
First
, by
media
focusing on social
issues
and
problems
, the general population could recognize the accurate identification of social concerns and the dark
side
of
reality
. Unless the emergencies and grim
news
are reported, the situations won’t be known to ordinary
people
, which will lead to reducing the possibility to improve the
problems
.
Consequently
, it could bring bad effects on
society
as a whole.
However
, if the social incidents and concerns are broadcasted accurately, the public will be able to elicit diverse perspectives and opinions so that
society
can find a way to deal with the
problems
.
For example
, in Korea, there were pieces of
news
reported about flood damage 2 years ago. The
news
coverages
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mainly focused on
problems
with subsurface drainage systems. After the situation was broadcasted widely, there was a big shake-up in the drainage system in the district of “강서” located on the western
side
of Seoul.
As a result
, the province had the smallest flood damage
this
year.
Secondly
,
people
may overlook major social
problems
if the
media
continues to focus on
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advances in
society
. Actually,
media
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the media

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must play a crucial role to reveal the dark
side
of
society
.
However
, if the
news
reports unfairly give weight to report the positive developments, there will be fewer opportunities to let
people
know about serious social
problems
, which makes
people
sleep on fatal
issues
.
Therefore
, the possibility to resolve social
problems
will be gradually reduced.
For example
, in 2021, the majority of
media
misled the public by reporting that legislation
of
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stalking crime had been reformed in a better way.
However
, truth is that the number of stalking crimes is increased by 70% compared to a year ago, and
people
have no way to be informed of
this
reality
. Eventually,
this
proves that the situation would be getting worse if the
media
unequally exaggerate (concentrate on) positive changes in
society
. In conclusion, I firmly disagree with
this
idea because the public should comprehend the precise identification of social concerns and the dark
side
of
reality
, and if the
media
continues to prioritize reporting positive developments,
people
may miss major social
problems
which will cause serious social
problems
in the future.
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