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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems on emergencies than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
news
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 reporting in
media
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 tends to place a greater emphasis on
issues
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 and emergencies than on affirmative progress. Some
people
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 think that individuals or
society
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 could be negatively influenced by those reports.
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, I strongly disagree with the idea because the public should acknowledge the precise recognition of social
issues
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 and
dark
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side
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 of
reality
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, and if the
media
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 continue to prioritize reporting positive developments,
people
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 could overlook the serious social
problems
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.
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, by
media
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 focusing on social
issues
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 and
problems
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, the general population could recognize the accurate identification of social concerns and the dark
side
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 of
reality
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. Unless the emergencies and grim
news
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 are reported, the situations won’t be known to ordinary
people
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, which will lead to reducing the possibility to improve the
problems
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.
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, it could bring bad effects on
society
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 as a whole.
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, if the social incidents and concerns are broadcasted accurately, the public will be able to elicit diverse perspectives and opinions so that
society
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 can find a way to deal with the
problems
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.
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, in Korea, there were pieces of
news
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 reported about flood damage 2 years ago. The
news
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coverages
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 mainly focused on
problems
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 with subsurface drainage systems. After the situation was broadcasted widely, there was a big shake-up in the drainage system in the district of “강서” located on the western
side
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 of Seoul.
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, the province had the smallest flood damage
this
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 year.
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,
people
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 may overlook major social
problems
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 if the
media
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 continues to focus on
favorable
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 advances in
society
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. Actually,
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media
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the media
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 must play a crucial role to reveal the dark
side
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 of
society
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.
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, if the
news
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 reports unfairly give weight to report the positive developments, there will be fewer opportunities to let
people
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 know about serious social
problems
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, which makes
people
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 sleep on fatal
issues
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.
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, the possibility to resolve social
problems
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 will be gradually reduced.
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, in 2021, the majority of
media
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 misled the public by reporting that legislation
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 stalking crime had been reformed in a better way.
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, truth is that the number of stalking crimes is increased by 70% compared to a year ago, and
people
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 have no way to be informed of
this
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reality
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. Eventually,
this
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 proves that the situation would be getting worse if the
media
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 unequally exaggerate (concentrate on) positive changes in
society
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. In conclusion, I firmly disagree with
this
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 idea because the public should comprehend the precise identification of social concerns and the dark
side
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 of
reality
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, and if the
media
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 continues to prioritize reporting positive developments,
people
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 may miss major social
problems
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 which will cause serious social
problems
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 in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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