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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think that they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

#plastic #bags #pollution #land #sea #people
Plastic
are
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the
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a
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 harmful substance as
they
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it
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 can not be recycled.
This
 is majorly being used by humans in the form of
plastic
 bags. It is suggested by the people that its utilization should be prohibited since
this
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has
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have
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tohave
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caused
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cause
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caused
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 a
lot
 of harmful effects
to
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on
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 land and
sea
.
This
 essay agrees
to
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this
 point, as
the
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apply
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plastic
 effect greatly
to
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the marine life and its production requires a
lot
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oflot
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investment
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 in
the
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apply
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equipments
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equipment
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 which is economically not suitable.
Plastics
 can not be reused
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or
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of
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or
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 recycled because
it
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they
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 have a non-
biodegradeable
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biodegradable
 property,
therefore
 to
decard
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discard
it
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them
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, it is burnt which
produce
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produces
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 a harmful chemical, polluting the environment. The leftovers are thrown in the
sea
 as
a
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waste which
distrub
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disturb
 the
sea
 animals in the water.
For example
, recently a
lot
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sea
 animals were found dead because of
plastic
 choking.
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,
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plastics
 should be banned,
instead
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,instead
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re-usable
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reusable
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 shopping bags should be encouraged by officials.
Moreover
, the products of
plastics
 require hi-tech
machinaries
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machineries
 and
consumption
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the consumption
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 of a
lot
 of energy resources.
This
result
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results
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 in a
lot
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oflot
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economical
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 pressure, to be clear it is
waste
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a waste
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 of investment on a product which can not be reused.
For instance
, the countries which have
change
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 their lifestyle by banning
plastics
, are developing 5% more than
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those who
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 are still using it. In conclusion, despite
plastics
are
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being
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 of daily use but
it
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they
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 should be banned as
it
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they
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distrubs
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disturbs
are
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marine life and
also
 puts a
lot
 of pressure on the economy of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • non-biodegradable
  • pollution
  • biodegradable
  • sustainable
  • mitigate
  • ecosystem
  • recycling
  • reusable
  • environmental impact
  • eco-friendly
  • implementation
  • convenient alternatives
  • enforcement
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