Nowadays many people believe that in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

it is true that starvation is still a big
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in many parts of the world
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despite
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despite
the high-tech
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devices
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devices
used in agriculture .
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measures
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measures
that can be taken to solve it . one of the main
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for
hunger
is the unequal distribution of agricultural products .in other
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all
people
or areas get the same
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amount
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amount
of the
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annual
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annual
harvest .
this
can be either due to political issues or lack of solid
distrubutary
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distributary
system
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in south
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people
go hungry
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in spite
of the
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wealthiness
of their ground .
this
is because of of the internal conflicts and the politicals problems going on in there .the
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second
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reason
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reason
is lack of awareness ,in some
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of the world
people
actually go
hungery
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hungry
because of their ignorance . one way to mitigate
this
problem
is building of a good
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delivery
delievery
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delivery
system that can reach
people
and
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especially
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specially
especially
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poor
poors
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poor
everywhere
for example
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organization
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that
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a lot of help regarding
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issues .another way is to
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politics from
people
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lives .wars and conflict have a
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detrimental
consequences and it leads to poverty and
hunger
.
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definitely
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definitely
unfair for
people
to suffer from
hunger
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behaviour .helding
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awarness programmes
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awareness
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especially
for new mothers to teach them
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how
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to properly feed their children is another way
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can have a huge impact on
hunger
worldwide. in conclusion ,
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and offers ways to mitigate
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problem
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