Today’s children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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market has resulted in a drastic increase in the amount of pressure from both schools and parents leading to enhanced stress levels
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among preadolescents and adolescents.
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has been evidenced by a recent study published by the
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of Toronto
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that over the past half a century, the number of Canadian teenagers suffering from anxiety and depression
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increased by approximately 25%. The modern pace of scientific invention, innovation and discovery has contributed to a significant increase in the
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required by the current generation of children to invest in learning the latest technological developments.
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, the modern child is confronted by the constant challenge of updating and upgrading their skills to keep up with these incessant changes. Based on a recent survey by
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Science Weekly magazine, over the
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quarter century, the pace of technological development especially in the field of computer science has doubled affecting the school curriculum and increasing the pressure on students around the world.
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