Today’s children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The current competitive

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market has resulted in a drastic increase in the amount of pressure from both schools and parents leading to enhanced stress levels

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among preadolescents and adolescents.

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has been evidenced by a recent study published by the University of Toronto concluding that over the past half a century, the number of Canadian teenagers suffering from anxiety and depression has increased by approximately 25%. The modern pace of scientific invention, innovation and discovery has contributed to a significant increase in the amount of

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required by the current generation of children to invest in learning the latest technological developments.

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, the modern child is confronted by the constant challenge of updating and upgrading their skills to keep up with these incessant changes. Based on a recent survey by the Science Weekly magazine, over the past quarter century, the pace of technological development especially in the field of computer science has doubled affecting the school curriculum and increasing the pressure on students around the world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Today’s children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

POPULATION: The number of people who decide not to have children has increased greatly Do you think this is a positive or negative development

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