Buying things on the Internet such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Depending on globalization, Online shopping is very famous among
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people
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advantages and disadvantages. We should discuss both sides of
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essay. Nowadays
people
have a very busy schedule. So, they have no time to waste on shopping activities. Because of
this
reason they are used to online shopping. They believe, can save money and time
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this
activity. On the other ,hand we can select more shopping sites and
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have more fashionable items. So, we can buy very suitable things for us. There are dresses, books, air tickets , and groceries that are
famous
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than others. For gaining
this
service we have lots of websites worldwide. For
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eBay, Amazon, and
Printerest
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like that. These platforms have
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different
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of goods for buying and we can connect with the international market. But some
people
believe it has more
disadvantage
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. Because
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these some items have
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warranty and lack
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quality. On the other
hands
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nowadays female youngest are addicted to online shopping. so, they have no sense
about
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money. It is a reason for building bad reactions. And some youngsters are trying to open their own businesses on online shopping platforms. It has a Dangerous way in the future. For ,instance
ebay
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eBay

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is a famous buying and selling platform among
people
. We should create accounts and
people
can start their own businesses
in
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this
platform. Someone doing wrong things using these sites. In conclusion,
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topic has more advantages outweigh
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drawbacks. In my point of ,
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we should develop
this
technological path for the future. It is a very important thing for us as a developing country and these are should balance with our lifestyle.
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