Buying things on the Internet such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Depending on globalization, Online shopping is very famous among
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people
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advantages and disadvantages. We should discuss both sides of
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essay. Nowadays
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have a very busy schedule. So, they have no time to waste on shopping activities. Because of
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reason they are used to online shopping. They believe, can save money and time
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activity. On the other ,hand we can select more shopping sites and
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have more fashionable items. So, we can buy very suitable things for us. There are dresses, books, air tickets , and groceries that are
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than others. For gaining
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service we have lots of websites worldwide. For
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eBay, Amazon, and
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Pinterest
like that. These platforms have
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different
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of goods for buying and we can connect with the international market. But some
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believe it has more
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. Because
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these some items have
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warranty and lack
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quality. On the other
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nowadays female youngest are addicted to online shopping. so, they have no sense
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money. It is a reason for building bad reactions. And some youngsters are trying to open their own businesses on online shopping platforms. It has a Dangerous way in the future. For ,instance
ebay
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eBay
is a famous buying and selling platform among
people
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can start their own businesses
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platform. Someone doing wrong things using these sites. In conclusion,
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topic has more advantages outweigh
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drawbacks. In my point of ,
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we should develop
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technological path for the future. It is a very important thing for us as a developing country and these are should balance with our lifestyle.
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