People find their life more and more dominated by their job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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amount of natural resources,
but
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nothing is free. Individual
life
is totally dependent upon their employment; how much
money
they earn, how much
money
they spend, and how much
money
they save, which help them to survive in
this
world, and
consequently
, their
work
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more control
on
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their
life
. I completely agree with the above statement because intense
work
and healthy
life
are interrelated. I elucidate my stand in the following paragraphs with some examples. To commence with, the
first
and predominant reason to support
this
concept is that to live a healthy
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lifestyle

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life style
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lifestyle

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you need a job. Not everybody is wealthy by birth,
mass
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majority of
people
have to
work
really hard to earn
money
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to fulfill

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fulfill
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their family's basic needs
such
as nutritious food, better education for children, future
saving
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etc.
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,
there
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life
is
bit
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imbalance
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imbalanced

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,
otherwise
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they will struggle. To exemplify, we can consider poor
people
who do not
any
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source of income and
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could not
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even afford food for themselves.
Furthermore
, many
people
want to live
luxurious
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life
and I personally think, they must
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. Unfortunately, they are unable to due to their job limitation. Let me put it another way, if
people
are working 40 hours a week to
fulfill
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their basic
need
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needs

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,
then
why should not they
work
for 50 hours a week to enhance their living
of
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standard
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standards

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.
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In conclusion, I recapitulate that there are innumerable supporting arguments that clearly indicate that
people
's
life
is totally dominated by their
work
, not
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because

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becasue
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they want to but to improve their standard of living.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
presented
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statement.
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