Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

in today's modern world ,the rising consumption of digital devices is
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fine
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disagree with
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and the following essay will illustrate
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with, many of
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devices can
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improve our
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example ,nowadays a lot of these equipment comes with a pen .and by
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as if we are writing on
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moreover
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of applications on it that allow us to open any e-book we want with
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and clear transition between pages .so it
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us the sense of reading a real book .
in addition
.these devices can be
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to teach students how to write and read along with many other
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started to
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their student
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of actual books and notebooks.the results of
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trend were remarkable and
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the end of the
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was
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even better
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before .provided that their exams were
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. in
this
digital age that we live in .we should focus more on how to make the maximum use of
this
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. to conclude ,mobile and computers made our life easier .and enhance our
skills
even
further
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