Schools should only offer subjects that are beneficial to students’ future career success. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different views on whether
students
should acquire particular knowledge in schools for chasing their careers in the future. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
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comment and in the following paragraphs, I would shed light on several reasons to support my stance. On the one hand,
students
going to
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are not merely for the purpose of entering
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.
First
and foremost, the courses which
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to have no relation to their future occupations are able to broaden their horizons.
For example
, by taking art
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, which can improve their
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, they might achieve the success of being an outstanding UI designer by merely learning the coding lesson.
In addition
, studying different lessons
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actually
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students
to realize what kind of fields they
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to step in and choose
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certain job from the bottom of their hearts.
Therefore
, diverse choices and possibilities are offered to them as they can search
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most desirable occupation during the whole school time.
On the other hand
, the early choice of chasing
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in the salad days limits their selections. Even though some subjects may be beneficial to
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career
success, they still lose a range of possibilities which may discover afterwards.
For instance
, it is common worldwide that employees gradually find out they are not suitable for the current job and struggle to change to another area due to their lacking
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some skills which are too late to learn.
Nevertheless
,
this
situation can cause various levels of anxiety and have a negative impact on their own lives. In conclusion, though offering only subjects in schools is indeed an efficient way to help
students
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their
career
, I believe widely studies along with various advantages are able to
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benefit
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benefit
to
students
not only in their
career
but
also
in their personal lives.
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