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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now “one big traffic jam”. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Technology is spreading everywhere, even in-carcar innovation,
people
 nowadays are experiencing new ride models every year. Indeed, a family of four members might have three to four
cars
. So, since car ownership is increasing, cities are suffering from extreme transit, especially during rush hours, when communities are going to work and school.
Firstly
, In many countries, traffic is a massive issue, some researchers say that it can
also
 affect the country's economy. In some countries , transport jams can delay
people
 from reaching their destination for almost 2 hours.
On the other hand
, many cities were not facing
this
 kind of traffic jam before,
although
 they had the same population in the
last
 30 years. So despite the fact that the population is increasing ,
this
 is obviously not the main reason, the fact is owning a car becomes a trend, and
this
 trend is the main reason behind the traffic jam. In my opinion, the trend of owning a ride is definitely wrong,
public
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 should start to learn how to use different kinds of transportation.
On the other hand
, governments should discourage
people
 from using their
cars
, they can easily specify a route for buses on the street, which will result in narrowing the car's way to give a space for public services,
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 community
then
,
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 will be encouraged to use public transport.
Secondly
, they can increase,
cars
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 prices, in
this
 case
also
people
 will think about using other services. Governments should work on decreasing the transit jam, they should assign transportation specialists to discover solutions to reduce these aspects and to work on discouraging the public from using their own
cars
 and encouraging them to use other services,
this
 can definitely, reduce service jams in the centre.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • commute times
  • pollution
  • car purchases
  • fuel prices
  • congestion charges
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • subsidies
  • incentives
  • electric vehicles
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • cycling
  • walking
  • dedicated lanes
  • pathways
  • sustainable options
  • educational campaigns
  • environmental impacts
  • health impacts
  • behavioral change
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