young people should follow older people’s advice. do you agree?

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and grow as time passes by, and as they grow older,
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tend to get wiser
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making choices since they have experienced
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stuff compared to
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community. A lot of old folks suggest
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to younger
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as they think their bits of
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are more validated, unlike youngsters. Some
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believe that
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community's instructions should not be
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to all the time
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any circumstances. It
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that every direction from
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community should be listened
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young
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because old
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could make mistakes too sometimes and the voice of smarter younger
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would not be heard. To start off, as humans it is obviously normal to make false information even for old
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with plenty of life experiences.
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, as
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society, we should filter and select what
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we can carry on for ourselves. To elaborate,
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sometimes make mistakes,
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why as
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society taking
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is good but we should probably not take that raw. To conclude, suggestions from older
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should not be taken every time and at every event, we should select wisely pieces of
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that fit our conditions.
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, many times brilliant yet young
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have a lot of great
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in their mind
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not considered by the older
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regarding of their age. It is usual that young and aged
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have different
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on their minds.
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, a big event which is rengasdengklok
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occurred in the '90s when the youngster thought it is better to declare Indonesia's independence as soon as possible. It is
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approved that the young
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do not follow the old
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's
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to wait long to declare Indonesia's freedom from colonialism and because of them, Indonesia proclamation their independence earlier.
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, the young mind usually has brighter ideas that do not need other
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from older
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. In conclusion, young
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should not straightforward always follow older
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's directions at all times because
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make mistakes and sometimes young
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have better
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in their heads. For that reason, young
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have
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sense
whether
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about whether
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advice
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the advice
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that
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given is good or
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.

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