Some people say education is the only critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

One the one hand good
education
is a highly recommended skill in the developed countries,
on the other hand
{tooltip}the highest wish{end-link}it is the biggest wish{end-tooltip} of many people in regions of poverty. But what makes
education
{tooltip}to the{end-link}the{end-tooltip} key factor for the development of a
country
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Instead
of a question, try statement: "There are several reasons that make
education
a key factor..."{end-tooltip} We must acknowledge that
education
is something that we all need. The differences are just what we learn. Mostly the limited educational horizons of poor and less educated people have more to deal with their personal situation than with problems of bigger effects on a
country
. Attending school is sometimes too expensive and it does not feed a family.
Nevertheless
there must be a reason for
education
. For me it looks like some countries have realized that
Education
is the key for the globalization process. If we take India
for example
we can see that a change in the educational system had changed the economy of the
country
. {tooltip}The{end-link}That{end-tooltip}
country
has changed from a poor region to a high potential {tooltip}aria{end-link}area{end-tooltip} for IT
knowledge
. In regard to
this
fact {tooltip}it is a must that the Governments of less developed countries take the power{end-link}Rephrase (to improve sentence structure): Government must take the power... and offer...{end-tooltip} of
education
seriously and offer it to a wide range of people. Spending money {tooltip}for{end-link}on{end-tooltip}
education
is the key tippy {tooltip}to{end-link}for{end-tooltip} a new future effects on the economy and social life. All in all I agree with the importance of
education
for the development of a
country
. Less
knowledge
leads to poverty and {tooltip}not to
knowledge
that has wide effects{end-link}
This
expression is confusing{end-tooltip}. Learning and
Knowledge
is Power and an investment in the near future and
therefore
it has to be an official task.
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