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Some people say education is the only critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

One the one hand good
education
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 is a highly recommended skill in the developed countries,
on the other hand
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 {tooltip}the highest wish{end-link}it is the biggest wish{end-tooltip} of many people in regions of poverty. But what makes
education
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 {tooltip}to the{end-link}the{end-tooltip} key factor for the development of a
country
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Instead
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 of a question, try statement: "There are several reasons that make
education
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 a key factor..."{end-tooltip} We must acknowledge that
education
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 is something that we all need. The differences are just what we learn. Mostly the limited educational horizons of poor and less educated people have more to deal with their personal situation than with problems of bigger effects on a
country
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. Attending school is sometimes too expensive and it does not feed a family.
Nevertheless
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 there must be a reason for
education
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. For me it looks like some countries have realized that
Education
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 is the key for the globalization process. If we take India
for example
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 we can see that a change in the educational system had changed the economy of the
country
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. {tooltip}The{end-link}That{end-tooltip}
country
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 has changed from a poor region to a high potential {tooltip}aria{end-link}area{end-tooltip} for IT
knowledge
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. In regard to
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 fact {tooltip}it is a must that the Governments of less developed countries take the power{end-link}Rephrase (to improve sentence structure): Government must take the power... and offer...{end-tooltip} of
education
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 seriously and offer it to a wide range of people. Spending money {tooltip}for{end-link}on{end-tooltip}
education
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 is the key tippy {tooltip}to{end-link}for{end-tooltip} a new future effects on the economy and social life. All in all I agree with the importance of
education
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 for the development of a
country
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. Less
knowledge
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 leads to poverty and {tooltip}not to
knowledge
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 that has wide effects{end-link}
This
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 expression is confusing{end-tooltip}. Learning and
Knowledge
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 is Power and an investment in the near future and
therefore
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 it has to be an official task.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cornerstone
  • pivotal
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • reduced crime rates
  • civic participation
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare
  • political stability
  • government policy
  • investment
  • development indices
  • holistic approach
  • national development
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