Overpopulation is a big problem today in many major urban centers. What are the causes, and effects?

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in several
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such
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.
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advancement is extremely developed in
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.
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,
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region
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area
is
on
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progress to development, or some
area
still does not have any continent supply to support their
job
or daily
life
. For
this
essay I will elaborate,
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reason
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for

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issue
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the issue

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of overpopulation in town and are these problems have any effect in
next
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paragraph.
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,
in
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the
centers
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have more advanced than
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. According, everybody
need
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convenient stuff that can support their
life
for instance
education,
people
think if we study in
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, we will get the best teacher
,
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or instructors in college or university.
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, the best university
is usually place
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in the town.
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, for
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this
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great
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reason to move
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to urban.
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and
connection
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connections

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People
think if we have a
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in the big
city
, they will get a good
job
and
high
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salary. But the more high salary the more competition.
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culture
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and
experience
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people
to share their
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and they will get
connection
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with other
people
that may help themself to promotion
ir
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support them in advance. For these reasons,
people
decide to move their family come to
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for
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thrive
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their
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achievement.
Then
it becomes
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big
issue
of overpopulation in the
city
. I think it is a majority for a lot of countries.
Results
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of
people
immigrates
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is
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traffic
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jam,
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, air pollution, and noise population.
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, it is
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government
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duty to resolve
this
issue
to expand advancement to another
area
. In conclusion, everybody wants to
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in their
life
and not all that want to leave their home to the best
life
in the
city
but they have to leave because of the reason that I mention above.
Therefore
, if you want to reduce
this
issue
, the government should focus on
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of prosperity to
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