The charts detail the number of participants at the Olympics every 30 years from 1924 to 2014 in total and by gender.

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on the
of Olympic
from 1924 to 2012, while the bar chart shows how many men and women competed. Overall, the
competing in the Olympics has significantly expanded since it started.
, there were always more male
than female competitors, but the difference shrank dramatically over time as the proportion of female participants increased quickly. The bar graph shows that there were not many women competing, but by 1952, there were roughly 500 female
it peaked in 2012 at about 5000 after being under 1500 in 1984.
In contrast
, the
of men was significantly larger, starting at 3000 in the
year and rising steadily until it peaked at about 6000 in 2012. According to the line graph, the
Olympics had participation from about 3500 participants.
increased steadily, reaching almost 6000 in 1984. The
rose the most dramatically between 1984 and 2012, rising by 5500 and reaching fewer than 11500.
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