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You should spend about 20 minutes on the task. The maps below show the layout of James Park in 2017 and the proposed changes to the park in 2027. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on the task. The maps below show the layout of James Park in 2017 and the proposed changes to the park in 2027. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The given maps
illustrates
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 the current setup of James Park in 2017 and
juxtapsoses
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juxtaposes
juxtapose
juxtaposed
 it against a future reorganisation of the park based on proposed
changes
 after
rennovation
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renovation
. The most major
changes
 are the proposed removal of the Toddler Playground to build a new Theater, the significant expansion of the Science Center by at least
one third
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its
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 original size and the building of a
seperate
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separate
 gymnasium alongside the Main Playground. The
changes
 can be categorized as expanding the gamut of services offered by James Park currently to grow the number of monthly users
four-fold
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. The other
changes
 are
enlargement
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the enlargement
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 of the paths leading to each destination and the fountain being expanded to serve as a garden as well. The one thing that remains constant is the statue.
Overall
, the most significant change is the repurposing of the earlier
to
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Toddler Playground to build a Theatre in its place.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words changes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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