Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What are the causes of this? What are some possible solutions?

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sentence is a very common way to punish lawbreakers, it can not only
acts
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as a deterrent
on
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to

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committing
crimes
, but
also
ensure
security
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the security

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of the public.
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, as we can now find more and more
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offenders today,
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arises that
prison
is ineffective in terms of building a safer society. In
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essay, I will discuss the contributing factor to
this
phenomenon and some feasible ways to address the problem. Putting all
criminals
together could worsen their
behavior
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as they can make friends with each other,
therefore
leading to
higher
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possibility to commit
further
crimes
. To be more specific, wrong attitudes towards
crimes
can be spread across the
prison
through their conversation.
For example
, when less serious crime committers hear the story
from
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of

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terrible prisoners, they may find less guilty
about
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their
crimes
and
thus
more likely to do it again. They may
also
be misguided and persuaded by those who have already
get
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used to re-offend and are indifferent to
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prison
term
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. Once
prisoner
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prisoners

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have
such
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opinion
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, they would prefer to keep committing more
crimes
instead
of living a normal life. To deal with
this
issue, authorities can strengthen moral education in the
prison
and impose censorship on the content of prisoners’ communication.
In addition
, those who committed serious
crimes
and have negative emotions should be locked
up
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apply

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away from other
criminals
. By doing
this
, the
prison
could provide a better atmosphere for most
of
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prisoners
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. Another cause of re-offending is that
criminals
may find it hard to find
an
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employment
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when they re-enter
the
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society since co-operations and factories would be particularly cautious with candidates with criminal records. Without any source of income, these former prisoners would possibly make a living by stealing or even
robbery
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. There are two ways to solve the problem.
Firstly
, vocational training should be provided by the
prison
as specific job skills can enable
criminals
to find
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a job

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job
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jobs

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more easily in the future. If they can be employed after being released, there is no need to commit
further
crimes
with
stable
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income.
Secondly
,
government
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could issue unemployment
pension
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pensions

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to subsidies those who are jobless and struggling to live, so that they can at least be accessible to necessities. In conclusion, wrong attitudes towards
crimes
and unemployment could be two of
reasons
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the reasons

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why former lawbreakers choose to become re-offenders.
This
problem is devastating to social stability and should be highly regarded by the government. In my opinion, ways to address the root causes of the issue include strengthening moral education, better
prison
management and providing vocational training.
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