Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

We used to hear, you should spend a live
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while you are still a teenager because
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this
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, it will be
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real
life
.
Also
, young people are waiting to become an adult because they want to
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they want without permission from their parents.
Then
when you grow up, you want to be a child again. People
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never
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themselve
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themselves
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place. It is the common thing that they think. For
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I will elaborate my perspective on both
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in the
next
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To begin
with, youngsters think the
happinest
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happiness
happiest
in their
life
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freedom
such
as they can drive
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themselves
themselve
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themselves
, go to the pub, drink alcohol and make a decision. These
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that I mentioned are ways that they want to do after they become an adult. But
also
, they
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still spend
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time with their friend and do
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thing
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as well.
Thus
,
this
period
is the action
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explore
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yourself,
what
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do
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you like or dislike. Because
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we only have
this
era just once, you
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do it extremely you can. According,
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mature part
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we think we can do anything after 20
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old.
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the other hand,
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period
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with
a
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plenty of
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responsibilities
resposibilities
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responsibilities
in our
life
. It can slip to many parts,
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part, you will meet up with
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of people and you have to deal with them calmly.
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several
of
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problems will occur that you have
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it. In
life
part, you have to balance
you
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life
such
as for family, friends, and
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.
Furthermore
, you gonna become a parent for your child,
this
is am
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important
thing that you have to do the best
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raise
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him
or her.
However
, there is more thing that you can enjoy in
this
period
is you can earn money yourself. It means you allow
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yourself
to buy whatever with your good organise. To
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summerise
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, actually, both parts are primary to our
life
. You have to do the best role in each
period
.
Then
you will not
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regret
it when you think about it.
Besides
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great
verson
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version
itself,
then
make yourself happy in every step of your
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adolescence
  • Vibrancy
  • Self-discovery
  • Maturation
  • Fulfillment
  • Life milestones
  • Peer pressure
  • Personal autonomy
  • Financial independence
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Nostalgia
  • Adulting
  • Quarter-life crisis
  • Midlife achievement
  • Existential satisfaction
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