many students take partime jobs while studying in university , you think it’s a good idea or bad idea.

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There is no iota of doubt about the fact that Education is getting expensive every day and it's hard for parents to pay for their studies. Some
students
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do jobs in their free
time
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to support their
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study
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. I think it is a good idea, in the given essay we are going to delve into
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To begin
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with,
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are studying so they can make money in future whenever they do
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part
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time
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job
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, they not only learn how to make money but
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get experience. in fact, a lot of
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convert their
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time
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job
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into
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job
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after completion of their
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.
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, when food delivery companies hire full-
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employees they prefer those who had done
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part
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time
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as delivery men.
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,
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part
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time
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job
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embellish your profile as a
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employ
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, some
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who
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and do
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part
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together they could not able to manage both things together, which makes their life like a hell.
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, they not only lose their
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but
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fail their examination.
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, a lot of
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from India who did
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part
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time
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job
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in Canada they could not able to complete their
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study
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and in the
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end they had to come back to India. As a
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consequence
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, they lost
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and
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both. In conclusion, Even though making money while
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the study
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is necessary
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should manage both things together. In fact, if they can't manage it
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they should prioritize their
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over the
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.
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