Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons? Solutions to change negative attitudes?

Some individuals argue that
tourism
on a global scale is not desirable for local
people
.
This
essay will analyze the causes of
this
situation and suggest several solutions which can resolve
this
problem.
Initially
, many
people
oppose
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international
tourism
due to
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some reasons. They believe that numerous
tourists
stay a place can create a great deal of rubbish, which leads to environmental degradation and has a detrimental impact on
local
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the local
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ecosystem. A typical example is the Maldives, an island
that is
mainly dependent on
tourism
.
However
,
this
industry has taken a heavy toll on
local
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environment. The second problem
that
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is the cultural conflict between international
tourists
and local
people
.
For instance
,
tourists
usually wear revealing clothes, especially women, when they come to sacred sites
such
as temples or shrines.
Besides
, many
tourists
have disrespectful behaviours at sacred places, they often speak and laugh loudly, take photos in prohibited areas and do not follow compliance
with
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rules at
sites
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the sites
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where they come.
Moreover
, some international
tourists
suppose that they play a vital role in the development of
tourism
and
therefore
the authorities do not punish these
tourists
strictly when they do negative actions
such
as throwing garbage,
disturbing
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or disturbing
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public order, … In fact,
countries
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in countries
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that are predominantly dependent on
tourism
,
tourists
with
such
behaviours often only receive a warning or even be ignored by the authorities.
This
causes a conflict
to
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not only
local
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with local
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people
, but other
tourists
, and has a significant impact on the development of
tourism
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the tourism
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sector.
Furthermore
, the government can impose numerous punishments on behaviours having an adverse influence on the environment or cultural heritage
such
as throwing trash or wearing inappropriate clothes at religious places.
As a result
,
this
will encourage
tourists
to become more responsible and cautious when
traveling
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to a nation. In summary, many
people
have unfavourable attitudes towards international
tourism
because of its negative effects on the environment and cultural heritage.
Therefore
the authorities have to impose the mentioned measures to change these views.
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